Rather long, but very thorough. Only thing I can really complain about is 'woul' in place of 'would' when talking about the second "crowed". (“I don’t suppose you woul like several dozen more ‘gifts’ ”)

We need more drunk Cadmar, entire missions and interludes should feature a Cadmar who started drinking 2 hours before the beginning.

Do misspellings of races even spawn minis? I was under the impression it was mostly proper names and places (and sometimes bad punctuation).

More to the point, would "turin" be an ME mini or a kidnapped mini-Balrog?

A most impressive mission, very well done and well written, and while I can't say I've read the fanfic it was about, I'm rather glad I haven't.

You seem to be missing something. Like, say, beta credits. Just saying.