What is /with/ this influx of Time Lords into HQ? Is it the promise of TARDISes? 'cos I mean really, those DoSAT-issued knock-offs aren't a patch on good old-fashioned Gallifrey-make.

I suppose it's all down to that so-called 'reboot'? It's not enough that my bloomin' planet gets blown up offscreen (and I later find out Rassilon came back when I wasn't looking - seriously, I wasn't /that/ unobservant back then... was I?), but I have to put up with new mysteriously-named fellow Time Lords every time I turn around! I dunno, it almost makes me want to leave the old place behind... maybe take a tour out in the 'verses, check up on the Avon Rift...

Nah. Not yet, I don't think. Maybe in another few years - like, just before the Hobbit film comes out.

... sorry, don't mind me. I'm just cranky. Just came out of a couple of years of hibernation courtesy of a little mixup in DoSAT to find my partner's dead and I'm still stuck in a cranky body. Then I come on here and this is the first thing I...

... hang on. This isn't the HQ network. How did I get on here?

Um, look, just really ignore me.

-Agent Morgan, DMS

WHAT!!! SHE HATES LEVIATHAN! HOW DARE SHE! I LOVE LEVIATHAN!! HOW DARE SHE! Wait, was that redundant? GOLIATH IS AWESOME!
Hmm... let's see... Discworld (quite common), Artemis Fowl (I'm an Artemis Fowl fan too), His Dark Materials (read it about three years ago), and, that's pretty much it. But still... HOW DARE SHE HATE LEVIATHAN!

I have to say, I like them. Time Lord OCs you always have to be careful about, but The Scribe sounds like she can work well. (There is precedent; check out Morgan and The Fisherman to see how Time Lord agents have been handled before.) Also, as has been mentioned, the PPC has used TARDISes before. The Fisherman still uses his. An idea could be to have her come out of the plothole somewhere dangerous like DOSAT new technologies testing or the Reality Room or something, and have her TARDIS be destroyed and unsalvageable, if you want to continue that plotline.

As for not knowing about the Time War, I think it could be a very powerful story if you write her only learning about it for the first time through the PPC.

And while "Because it's cool!" is a flimsy justification on its own, the Doctor isn't the only one to have a sonic device. Jack Harkness had a sonic blaster and seemed to imply that those, at least, weren't particularly uncommon; the Master had a laser screwdriver, mostly to be able to boast that it was so much cooler than a stupid sonic one. So if you can come up with a good reason - "sonic engineering is a popular class at the Academy," maybe - I see no reason why you can't keep it.

As for Lisa, thirteen is a bit young. I have an agent who's 17-18, and he's on the younger side of the age curve.

I would really like to see a Young Wizards-verse agent, though. I think she could be really cool.


I know this is just a short bio and you can't put everything in. But, as it looks now, if you tighten up the backstory a little and flesh them out as characters, I think you could have a great pair of agents on your hands!

Were this a request I was PGing, I would probably make my call based on how you wrote the two of them in your writing sample and just make some comments on possible problems here, so I'll do that now:

The Scribe: I don't know the Whoverse so I can't make a call on the validity of her background, but she doesn't sound bad as long as the emotional connection to her TARDIS is canonical. I wouldn't name her "THE Scribe", though - aside from being awkward to read, it'll be irritating to type so many times - but just "Scribe". Also, I'm assuming that the Time War is a known part of Whoverse canon, and so I believe it'd be almost impossible for an active agent working in that field not to have active access to the knowledge.

I like the touch about indigestion. Saying she "absolutely hates squick" is all nice and good, but squick is subjective, so all you're actually saying here is that she hates the things that make her cringe and hide, which is just redundant - you haven't defined what it actually is that she hates.

Lisa: Generally, unless something has changed while I've been away, if a fic is unpublished it doesn't actually affect canon - as in, it hasn't gone out into the world of public access and so can't affect the word worlds. You could easily change this by pretending the fic was once posted and then deleted.

Having Lisa be speshully dumped in the PPC is not the best idea - how about just have her be recruited like so many other agents are? You don't want PPC agents to have things happen "luckily" very often; it makes them seem favoured by the Ironic Over-Power/Universe/TPTB/et cetera, which they never are. I worry about her youth in that it's far too easy to write children (or teenagers) as adults, or at least as equals with adults. I see that you're going for contrast with Scribe, but I don't think it needs to be that extreme. If you don't want to change the fic she came from, how about saying she was thirteen when she was recruited, and put to work behind a desk for the next five or six years until she could go out into the field?

Overall, for the both of them, you're paying a lot of attention to how they look, but as this is just bios I'm not worried. Their interactions oculd be very funny; just be careful not to push them to extremes just to make contrast.

And... those are all my initial thoughts. I would like to see some more depth of character for both of them, but again, that's what the writing sample is for. I hope that was helpful!

The Scribe: First, about TARDISes and the PPC: The PPC used them occasionally, and at least one pair of agents uses one as an RC. So they seem to work in the PPC.
Another thing: Why is it that Time Lords all have a sonic whatever? It was an invention of The Doctor... or has it been leaked and I don't know about that?
Also, since when are Very Bad Ideas endearing? They're very bad.

Lisa: The mysterious sole surviver of a deletion. Does that whole "my world has been deleted and I've probably been floating through the space between spaces" thing even bother her? She's thirteen. Also, oh wonder, she still has her manual... what a nice coincidence.
Also, thirteen seems to be a bit young to become an agent.