Subject: I really liked it.
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Posted on: 2011-11-26 11:32:00 UTC
About the only problem I had was that we don't get a good enough description of the Yatan to explain how feline creatures with paws can use swords and such, but given that such a description may have been forthcoming in another chapter, that may have been an invalid complaint. Otherwise, yeah, it's great.
I recently posted a chapter of my original story on DA, and I want feedback. So I thought, what better people to ask for advice on writing improvement than my fellow illustrious scholars of the PPC?
http://av-marten.deviantart.com/art/Shadowsage-Ch-1-270775430
About the only problem I had was that we don't get a good enough description of the Yatan to explain how feline creatures with paws can use swords and such, but given that such a description may have been forthcoming in another chapter, that may have been an invalid complaint. Otherwise, yeah, it's great.
That was one of the things I was a little worried about, but yes, in that character's next appearance I go into a little more detail describing her.
Thanks for commenting!
Perhaps it's like in Redwall?