Subject: Thanks!
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Posted on: 2011-11-07 20:31:00 UTC
Yeah, this mission was just so crazy, you know? A short mission against this fic just wouldn't do it for me, you know?
I'm glad you liked it! :D
Subject: Thanks!
Author:
Posted on: 2011-11-07 20:31:00 UTC
Yeah, this mission was just so crazy, you know? A short mission against this fic just wouldn't do it for me, you know?
I'm glad you liked it! :D
In which Anneli, Cindy, and Xanthus deal with not one, not two, but three Sue-types mangling the Mass Effect canon with a stupid plot and some very unfortunate implications.
https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=1OyjfWKA-b8wONh7ggdtvqvUbJjY_qG76vYwoDTkZE
Seriously, the unfortunate implications.
Anyway, I do have a couple of things I need to take care of. So... recruits and rescued children:
Emmeline T'Gonda (She'll be going to the Nursery, most likely.)
Seraphina T'Gonda (She'll be staying with Emmeline.)
Marlan Rodriguez (He, and the other two children Anneli adopted will both be mine as supporting characters.)
Sorsha Rodriguez
Saim'Rodriguez nar Citadel
Light (This one is going for sale, so get 'im while he's hot!)
Now, for some minis:
Nobel Six (mini-Hunter)
engineer Adam (mini-Colossus)
And finally, some loot:
(x2) Poorly defined plot point necklace (Andelko T'Gonda version)
(x1) Omni-tool
Feel free to take whatever loot you want, and I hope you guys enjoyed! :D
I got a little distracted in the last couple of pages before they decided to charge the Stus, but it was more because I don't know any of these fandoms. I was kind of getting worn out with the canon, while the agents were keeping my interest.
It is interesting how things kind of come in groups isn't it? I found a Lights Shawn and now there is a Light, which is very cool, because Lights Shawn can have a friend.
I loved how Anneli was the Innocents, and Emmeline's choice at the end was powerful.
Alex in particular was an annoying Stu, but I think that the thing that would have driven me up the wall the most about the fic was the baby talk! I don't even let my three year old use grammar as terrible as that dialogue! Really if a kid who is barely three can master saying, "He is..." "I am..." and "They are..." Then surely someone old enough to type (and spell pretty decently while doing it) is capable of mastering it.
Anyway! Well killed, Herr! I look forward to the next installment.
Yeah, I did my best to explain stuff, and in the last couple pages before they charged the Stus I was hoping to shake things up a bit with the 'they gathered everyone and neuralyzed everyone else'.
LOL, yeah, Light and Lights Shawn will be awesome.
Thanks! And actually, with Emmeline, the plot bunnies attacked me while I was working on that bit of the chapter. In short, expect something with Emmeline to come up soon! And yes, the Innocents will return. :D
Oh my God, I know! Some of the fic's typos were just frustrating, but honestly, nothing about this fic could've infuriated me more than the fact that it trivialized abduction twice, and that the first time around it trivialized child abduction.
Thanks for the feedback! :D
It's no secret that I'm a fan of long missions. And this was really good, with good pacing and all. I liked how the stupid just kept coming and coming.
And your agents are funny and wellwritten together.
'Twas a good mission, Herr Doktor. I applaud your stamina.
Yeah, this mission was just so crazy, you know? A short mission against this fic just wouldn't do it for me, you know?
I'm glad you liked it! :D
Loved the mission. On a side note, I saw a typo:
“Oh,” said Cindy, looking at the Stu as the scene began to form around them. “So it would be like a…” The witch grimaced. “No, that’s a really bad analogy.”
“What, like a house-elf being invited to Hogwarts?” asked Cindy.
The witch cringed, nodding. “Yes, that was the one,” she admitted, her gaze turning away from Xanthus. “I really shouldn’t have used that. House elves aren’t very fortunate in my continuum.”
Unless Cindy normally talks to herself...
On another note, if you don't mind, I'd rather like that omni-tool for my agents. Grace will wreak plenty of havoc with that.
That was meant to be a convo with Xanthus. Thanks for pointing it out!
And yes, the omni-tool is yours. :D
It was really pretty long, but overall I thought it was great. Keep it up!