...which is "Writing a fanfic without ever actually playing the game"!

I know, the author said he played the game; but somehow, I doubt it: I think he just watched this LP:

http://bd.baldurk.org/lp/84

It's a pretty good LP, and comments are made through subtitles. Referring to the intruders as "ninjas" comes from those subtitles (from part 9) and so does "Fish Tank" as the name of the bar (part 33).

So it's my theory that this guy watched this LP instead of playing the game, decided to write a fanfic anyway, and trashed the ending despite having access to it (through the LP).

All in all, very nice work, folks. The mission dragged a bit in the middle because, like you said, it was keeping to canon (and no I don't have any suggestions for preventing this because I couldn't have solved the problem myself); but by the end it was obvious just how much of a badfic this is.

This was a long mission, and it took me a while to get into it. Until I got towards the end, and sheer madness took over the universe. For what it's worth, I do think this author is a troll; the majority of the fic may just be a failure to understand the game's plot; but that ending chapter with the reveal is just utter, utter insanity. There's no way that was the result of thinking out the clues; I think the whole fic was setup for the nonsensical, pointless ending (hence why it omitted so much dialogue and condensed scenes down to a few sentences). Also, egsomelete. Egsomelete is the most beautiful misspelling I've ever come across, and we should totally start serving it in the Cafeteria now.

Anyway, that was all a long-winded way of saying that I can understand why this mission was so hard to get through, and I'm impressed that you kept at it long enough to get it posted.

If I may be so bold to point out a few typos:
He took in a deep breath. Oh, and the Origami Killer never kills babies...
You're missing the opening quotation before "Oh."
“A Gary Stu?” asked Xanthus. “But that doesn’t make any sense. He hasn’t really done that much to be breaking the canon so hard, so… This doesn’t make any sense.”
“I guess we’ll find out later,” replied Xanthus, shaking his head. “For now… I think this charge list might finally have a definite victim.”
You've got poor Xanthus replying to himself! Surely, his new partners are better company than that!
As Norman was not wearing ARI, he was not affected by the flash of light.
I don't know what ARI is, but since he does get successfully neuralyzed, I think you meant to say he was affected by the flash.

GDocs says I need permission to get in, which i don't have. Could you please open up the doc?