Subject: Whee! Part 5! (nm)
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Posted on: 2011-07-30 03:35:00 UTC
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Semi-MST amidst the glaurunging spam by
on 2011-07-22 23:30:00 UTC
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So, I tried my hand at an MST. It's not finished yet, and I doubt it's very good, but I thought I'd share anyway. It's mostly practice for writing (hopefully) future agents Lophy and Anta.
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Paaaaaart 6. (nm) by
on 2011-07-31 01:10:00 UTC
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Whee! Part 5! (nm) by
on 2011-07-30 03:35:00 UTC
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Part 4 is up! (nm) by
on 2011-07-24 23:34:00 UTC
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Better by
on 2011-07-26 05:48:00 UTC
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I take that back. by
on 2011-07-28 00:06:00 UTC
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Chapter 6 was just posted today, after more than a month. Curses. Now I have to edit the end of Part 5.
Ah well. Such is life. -
Yay! by
on 2011-07-27 22:32:00 UTC
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I'm glad it was better.
The story only has five chapters at the moment, so unless the author updates, Part 5 will be the final part.
I don't know if it's missionable. Most of the charges are language-related, not canon-related. Are we allowed to kill things just based on various abuses of the English language? -
Maybe by
on 2011-07-28 05:38:00 UTC
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I read ahead to Chapters 5 and 6 on the original. She exhibits all the characteristics of a Sue, but the story isn't far enough yet for her to disrupt the canon. It also looks like the author really is trying to make a character out of her self-insertion.
All you can really nail her on right now are grammatical problems, spelling, and minor temporal/spacial distortions (seriously, how freaking long does it take to go over a cliff or open a door?). There are departments for that.
If you want to assassinate her, it looks like you'll have to wait for the rest of the story. -
Jokes vs. Corrections by
on 2011-07-23 05:31:00 UTC
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This was fun to read, but generally, an MST should focus less on pointing out each punctuation error, and more on making jokes about what's happening in the story. Obviously, sometimes the grammar can fuel such jokes, when they cause funny or unusual imagery, but just pointing out every missing period and misspelled word gets repetitive for the reader. For example, I found your running gag about the capitalized Father referring to God hilarious, as the MSTers got more and more flustered by it. So in future MSTs, try to make more of the stupid behavior in the fic, rather than the writing errors of the fic's author (except those that make for funny jokes).
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Yeah... by
on 2011-07-24 02:59:00 UTC
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*beats down inner punctuation nazi* Will do. Thanks much.
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Got it. by
on 2011-07-24 02:10:00 UTC
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Pretty good by
on 2011-07-23 04:48:00 UTC
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It's a pretty good assessment of the fic. I actually laughed out loud when I read "Suedanese."
FYI, the original cast recording of Sweeney Todd is old enough for cassette ;) -
Mkay, will fix. by
on 2011-07-23 04:51:00 UTC
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Thanks!
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More commentary by
on 2011-07-23 05:08:00 UTC
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It's really getting good around Chapter 3, especially since they're more concerned with taking shots at the horrible story. At that point, bad punctuation is a given.
I hope you can eventually return to this fic as an agent. I'm getting really sick of this protagonist. This is begging to be sporked. -
"non-Twitter" update by
on 2011-07-24 04:01:00 UTC
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10:00 PM: It's done. I officially hate, hate, HATE HATE HATE this movie. *goes off to rant wildly*
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What annoys me most is... by
on 2011-07-24 02:49:00 UTC
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