Subject: Re: Bravo!
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Posted on: 2011-07-20 06:16:00 UTC
Personally, I'd have liked it more if you killed the troll by deflating its ego or making such a display of ignoring it that it kills itself trying to get the agents' attention, but maybe that's just my preference for poetic justice. My splitting hairs aside, good work.
http://fish-custard.webs.com/twila.htm
Evie and the Fisherman deal with a troll that succeeded in making the Twilight continuum even more unbearable than usual!
There's a short interlude set just after this mission that's coming soon.
Enjoy!
Someone actually WROTE that? Ugh. Definitely a troll.
That said, fun mission! I like the snark of your CADs. "Or just run. Fast." :)
Very nice job, very nice indeed. I've been waiting for someone to take care of that for awhile. It's nice to know that it's well and truly dead.
Thanks to everyone for their assorted compliments! I'm really glad you enjoyed it as much as I did!
This mission was great and you deserve a medal for taking on that piece of drakh. *hands over a blank medal*
"Don’t ask it for impossible things, or it might do something crazy. Like create them.” Great.
I really like your Agents. A Time Lord and an anthropomorphic GLaDOS? Best. Duo. Ever.
A suggestion for all the readers: try to imagine Evie talking in the same manner as the canonical GLaDOS. Doubles the fun.
I'm very happy to see this fic dead. The troll part was pretty good too.
You went with the sparkle wolves? Cool! :] (I'll probably try adopting one, heh heh.) And the other canons were definitely more OOC than Edward. (Isn't he considered a Canon 'Sue also?) Good mission overall!
This was, overall, a very entertaining mission. The interactions between your agents was well done and I enjoyed how you made the troll a viable threat. Too often I think we get rid of the various Sues, Stus, and what-have-yous far too easily, so it was nice to see a bit of a struggle.
I was not, however, a fan of how you brought Bella back. Not because I hate Bella (I really couldn't care less), but because of the time travel aspect. It felt... sloppy, I guess. I can't quite put my finger on it.
But besides that? Awesome.
Personally, I'd have liked it more if you killed the troll by deflating its ego or making such a display of ignoring it that it kills itself trying to get the agents' attention, but maybe that's just my preference for poetic justice. My splitting hairs aside, good work.
If it means anything, I did try to think of a better way to do that, but I couldn't think of anything that allowed relevant charges to be collected and Bella to survive. Don't worry, random time travel won't become a deus ex machina in my missions. :P
Other than that, I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the concrit. ^_^
The fic.... It's like My Immortal. D:
Wow. If I ever stepped into a Twilight fic for a mission, I'd be tempted to tell Bella to grow a spine too.
Not even Twilight deserves that. How are your agents still sane?
Exactly how many sparklewolves are up for adoption?
Yes, here they are, and I'll list them (and the mission) on the wiki in a minute. Sorry! >_
List of mini sparklewolves:
+ carlose
+ emet
+ alison
+ rosaline
+ alise
+ edword
+ Rosemarie
+ alisen
+ edmard
+ carliz
+ Allice
+ Edwat (wat? about sums this whole story up!)
+ Bellar
+ Edmond
+ Jakabob
+ Jabob
+ Jessa
+ Carlisse
+ Carliel
+ Esmie
Would you mind if I adopted Carlose? I’ve always wanted to have my own sparkling mini-wolf. eue
Loved your mission by the way! Your agents really work well together, and it’s one of the few missions that has made me laugh out loud in a while. Hope to see more soon! ^_^
http://ppc.wikia.com/wiki/Mini/Twilight
Adopt away, there are plenty to go around! I wonder what the record for most minis from a single fic is?
Aww, mini-Sparklewolves sound adorable. May I adopt Edword, please? :D
May I have my agents Chalk and Jenka adopt Jessa, please?
My brain just escaped through my left ear, fell to the floor and sought refuge under the couch. It's going to be all covered dust bunnies and cat hair when I find it again. Oh, well, that's my own fault for reading a mission in a Twilight troll fic. ^^
8.33%. I sniggered. Evilly.
And the way you disposed of Midnite, nice, very nice indeed.
Also, your choice of music from the exorcism made me laugh out loud.
And yes, for all the canon defilement, Edward wasn't that OOC.
As for the music, well, how could I not. ^_~