Subject: Good job!
Author:
Posted on: 2011-06-28 21:48:00 UTC
I especially liked The Fisherman. Both of your agents were pretty funny, and the mission was good overall. Very nice job.
Subject: Good job!
Author:
Posted on: 2011-06-28 21:48:00 UTC
I especially liked The Fisherman. Both of your agents were pretty funny, and the mission was good overall. Very nice job.
Didn't take me long to get stuck in! :P
http://fish-custard.webs.com/oddexperiences.htm
New(ish) Agents Evie and the Fisherman take on a squicky PWP lemon in the Suzumiya-verse, contending with a hermaphrodite with Bad Biology and one particularly submissive character undergoing something of a personality transplant.
Needless to say, the fic (and the mission, thanks to the excerpts) is NSFW and somewhat NSFB.
Seriously, I don't know much about the Haruhi Suzumiya canon (though I am working on it), but this fic is just... GAAAAHHHH!
Wow, that was kinda ridiculous... Especially the hermaphrodite!sex bit.
Also, I would've said I went in there because I wouldn't know that it's bad otherwise, but that's just me.
Great job! =D
I especially liked The Fisherman. Both of your agents were pretty funny, and the mission was good overall. Very nice job.
I like that you use excerpts from the text, rather than just referring to what the characters does. I think missions are best when you see parts of the original fic in all its awfulness.
...when reading missions, and it helps with writing them too; it better allows you to react to the fic and its horror!
I loved the Portal reference.
But now I have a question. Are we sure that the raw fabric of time is capable of killing that Sue? 'Cause they often tend to be quite tough.
Hmm... you might be right about the assassination though. The last thing we want is for the Sue to land somewhere else in spacetime and cause more havoc. I think I might retcon in a more... final death for her.