Nicely done! Seriously, this fic... I dunno how to describe it. Thank goodness that abomination's over and done with...

Yay for Suicide, Diocletian, and... Makes-Things? Huh.

...I can say, wow, that was a pretty awesome mission. It was a little slow to start, but once it got going, which it did pretty quickly, it was great. I just wish they'd thought to take Flanor back to HQ with them...

Very impressed,
Lleu

I finally got to read it. And finish it, since that was the longest mission I've ever read. I mean, that's almost novella-length! That fic was AWFUL. It's one of the worst I've read a mission for. And I still can't figure out why they bothered to say he was Harry Potter.

Suicide is very cool, but I especially like Dio, so I'm glad she's back. The other agent pair isn't as interesting to me, especially since Ilraen doesn't (yet) have very much personality that I can see.

Two things. First, some people think Tom Bombadil was a Vala, and there's nothing I know of in canon to say that Valar are affected by the Ring. I don't know why they would be. So I don't see a reason to assume that only Eru isn't affected.

Second, you'll have to have a really good explanation for who said that Makes-Things was dead and why they said that. The theory I'd heard was that he created the dead body so he could go on a long vacation away from PPC agents. Then, he'd know why we think he's dead. Or maybe he told someone to hide where he's going, and that person did it by claiming they'd seen his body. I don't know the details of his supposed death, but we need some good explanation of why someone said he was dead and why he doesn't know that someone said he was dead. Please don't just tell me that's how the PPC works.

This mission was purely awesome. It seemed like every little thing that could possibly be a problem for the agents was, and it serves as a great example of not making things too easy for them.

The Harry thing was just severely creepy for me. I like how you guys characterized him as sucking energy from powerful canons to explain the constant cuddling. It reminded me of the character replacements from For Your Eyes Only; I hate it when a mature character is made to act babyish. It's just...unsettling.

Wow, that was an amazingly terrible badfic and a really entertaining mission. It's good to see Suicide, Diocletian, and Makes-Things back.

Funny, sarcastic, and overall wonderfully well-written. :)

~Xani

A great mission there, of epic proportions! Not only that you solved my problem of finding a DoSat PPC for my next mission. Makes-Things is alive!!

...as opposed to, I don't know, OPENED? I laughed way more at that then I should have...

I give you and Tungsten Monk my sincerest sympathy for having braved this thing. I give you more credit for having turned it into an absolutely awesome mission. That, and Makes-Things.

The fight with the ficubus was very well-written. I almost thought Nume would end up dead/quite injured.

Yeah, that was a really long mission. I had to read it in two sittings, but it was totally worth it, especially for the Sue-wraith manifesting. (I almost wanted you to say that the glitter level was over 9000, though...)

Awesome job, Nesh. =D

Having read the mission through, my platonic affection for Nume and Ilraen is even more deeply rooted now. I also think Suicide is hilarious and Diocletian deserves a medal for handling him. :D

*dissolves into incomprehensible squeeing in which the words "and ohmygod Makes-Things is alive and back and YAY!" can be made out*

You already received what feedback I had to offer in my beta comments. Still, a bit more positive reinforcement never hurts. Kudos to you both for suffering through this for our entertainment.

That was a lovely mission and it made me very happy. I do not have concrit right now unfortunately; it is lost in the midst of my brain going splort in both joy and a frazzling day. If you like I will give you more detailed thoughts later but for now I thought it important to inform you that it was awesome, and so are you and Tungsten Monk. Cheers. :D

That was an awesome mission! So much awesomeness.

Also, Makes-Things! Excuse me while I squee uncontrollably for a while.

I saw this story on the Pit when it first came out and I'm so very glad it became the subject of a mission. :D I figured I'd stop being a creeper just to say thanks for taking it on.

I like them long! ... The missions.

And a properly horrible story. I think that the worst fics makes the best PPCings.

Oh, minor nitpick. I found this mistake: "before before replacing it again"

They were already written, so it would have been a shame to delete them after the fact.

My litany of comments during the Beta'ing is probably enough from me, so all I have left is 'yay'!

A great read, kudos for turning something so... wrong into something so amusing and entertaining! ^_^

And it's nice to see Makes-Things back in action. Wibbly-wobbly timey-wimey and all that.

Really, really great mission! It was a good mix of funny (oh man, some of the horrible things in that were hilarious!) and also somewhat dramatic.

I found myself loving Agent Suicide. I have a terrible urge to make one of my agents a fan of Agent Suicide, just because that would be funny. >_>;

Also, I thought somebody did give an on screen death to Makes-Things after the fact...? Ah, here's a link: http://warrior-joe.livejournal.com/5155.html

Though, this may or may not matter. Weirder things have happened in HQ than people somehow returning back from the dead... Or never having been dead in the first place. Or the /wrong/ them being dead...

*eyes that duplicator/transmogrifier/time machine warily...*

I'll have to read the mission when I have a few hours to spare (the curse of going online before work :P ) but I've done a quick check on my minis-database.

Congrats, Nesh, you found twelve new minis!

New (unadopted) minis:

Tom Bombadill
Baliman
Gluin
Lothlurien
Meras
Cereborn
Boromis
Cheif of the Dunedain
Sarmon
Udyn
Haldri
Cnrdan the Shipwright

Kidnapped (adopted) minis:

Elrdon
Bormir
Arwin
Khazad-dym
Flui

Anyone's welcome to come and adopt one of the unadopted ones! ^^

You dropped a bridge on him! And I get to be the first one to say so!

This was so great! Seriously. I loved what you did with the opening. The agent interaction was interesting.

I get the feeling that perhaps we are going to learn something about Nume's past soon. It was really interesting how frantic he suddenly became when they arrived at FicPsych. And Ilraen! He's getting so responsible and mature and his own character now! (You know excepting the whole psychotic break thing.)

I have the link open to read more of Suicide and Dio's missions--I swear!--but I've not read them yet. I love these guys. I really think that Suicide has just become my favorite agent. He's hilarious--and dirty minded! It's a wonderful combination.

I liked watching him and Nume play off each other, and I hope they go on more missions together, just to see what happens.

The only thing that I thought was a bit odd was how laid back Nume and Suicide took it when Ilraen went off his rockers. I thought they'd have a bit more urgency in making sure the two of them didn't fall off the edge. I did love how Suicide was being all instructive about it. He really seems to have a teaching side to him on occasion.



I saved some lines that I really liked.


After considering them for a moment, he discreetly laid a couple of pieces of bacon on top of them.

(was that just a hint of a triumphant, I-just-made-someone-I-don't-like-really-uncomfortable swagger in his walk? Why yes, it was),

Diocletian leaned over and gently closed Suicide's gaping jaw, and lifted Nume's wrist to check his pulse.

nor the fact that his eyes turned "plead," which manifested as a hreen-blello plaid.new Sue color. It sounds properly revolting.

"'A hord,'" he said, "'was being blown.'"
From the fic:

I was really feeling the agents' frustration with this stinker, and I can't wait to see where all the little hints you were dropping about them are going to lead. "A breeze stirred at the invocation of canon" was a nice touch, as well.

One minor issue that didn't really detract from the story: assuming you were aiming for German, the word is "scheiss" or "scheiß", not "scheist".