Subject: Permission granted!
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Posted on: 2011-06-01 23:11:00 UTC

I like the writing sample quite a bit, and I'd be interested to read about the team's exploits. Let me know when you update. {= )

One word of advice, though: use double–line breaks between paragraphs. Without indents, it can be hard to track where one ends and another begins without them. I also stumbled a bit over the description of "Frost" as an unlikely name, because plenty of people have Frost as a surname, but then I realized you meant it as his only name.

Anywho, welcome to PPC writing. Enjoy!

~Neshomeh

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