That badfic is...wow. Just wow. Poor canons, namely Sora, Tidus and Cloud (my favorites out of the ones listed).
As for the Sue...what do you call it? It's not even a being with a form- it's a Formless!Sue. It's a new type of Sue! The description is so bland that it has no form whatsoever and is just an amorphous blob! This may be our most dangerous foe yet!
Also, I hope I'm not nitpicking, but I noticed that in this sentence-

Also...might not be safe for work, even though the writing does not at all merit the M rating at all.

-you put "at all" twice. Just wanted to point that out. Don't want to be doing things the Suethors might do.

I too, like cameos. They're always fun to see.

I'm not terribly familiar with the canon, but that did not prove to be much of an issue with this story. So good job on that.

I have two things I'd like to point out, however.


"Even MORE point objects?" Perhaps should be "pointy" or "pointed"

"If the rest of the fanfiction prove toxic" Should be "proved"

Of course, that's less than people find in my missions with three beta readers. So no real complaint there. Just thought I'd point them out.

Yay! It is nice to see new stuff from you. Also, thanks for the cameo-- I kind of wish other people would do cameos more often from others. Sometimes I think each RC is a little island. :U

Yuck... I'm working on a mission and a half at the moment, but yuck. Fic like this is more pointless than anything. I'd take it if I was free.

It was still funny. Poor Shinra, she kinda looked like a ball in a pinball machine with all those portals...

And, judjing by both her Wiki page and this mission, I think that she must never meet Corolla. Or the little Floater would get hugged, kidnapped and adopted. Material for a new Things I Am Not Allowed To Do In HQ, perhaps?