Subject: Good mission
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Posted on: 2011-05-26 21:19:00 UTC

While I don't traditionally read slash, or bad slash missions, I'm trying to broaden my horizons.

I liked this mission. In particular, I enjoyed Abe.

Of course, it wouldn't be a bad idea to get a beta or two. I found this: "With trepidation she pulled out her CAD out of her pocket" but I'm not the best at catching stuff, so there could very well be more. There were some other instances that could probably have been phrased better or used less repetition, but these are nit-picks. It was a good mission, overall.

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