Subject: Permission granted!
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Posted on: 2011-05-20 00:39:00 UTC

I nearly typed "Premission" there. Fairly apt, as typos go. *g*

Just a couple of things: I recommend reading up on the rules of ending punctuation in dialogue; there were quite a few periods that should have been commas.

Second, you made a reference to the fact that there have been full agents as young as eleven, if my memory serves, so while portraying kids as kids is a good and wise thing, it's a little weird if they seem too young and helpless compared to their peers. Kids are almost always smarter than adults give them credit for, anyway.

I am amused by the three Ss, Steve, Sasha, Shawn... and then Wallis.

Also, for posterity, the original "agent training" story.

~Neshomeh

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