Re: Permission granted!

Permission Request by Meta on 2011-05-16 20:25:00 UTC Reply

So here it is, after returning to the drawing board and coming up with a completely new idea for a spin-off, the introductory permission piece is ready.

The concept:
Training Center 2147 will feature long time PPC Agent Monty Biggins training up the next generation of recruits. To start with the recruits will feature a combination of characters that have either grown up in the PPC nursery and now wish to train as agents, or brand new recruits who have only just entered the world of the PPC and need to know what they are getting into. If I’m writing the series for long enough then I may eventually have the junior agents graduate and run missions themselves, but for the time being they will be ‘in training’.
In this introduction we meet the first four recruits, Steve Fontwell, Sasha Lipson, Shawn Cooper Wright and Wallis.

I hope you enjoy the piece and if you have any questions about the concept or characters feel free to ask.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1o5Rq7RmU3gCRkCxTk1h-MCfrEoCHTzCt_yrEE7Wuvfo/edit?hl=en

Permission granted! by Neshomeh on 2011-05-20 00:39:00 UTC Reply

I nearly typed "Premission" there. Fairly apt, as typos go. *g*

Just a couple of things: I recommend reading up on the rules of ending punctuation in dialogue; there were quite a few periods that should have been commas.

Second, you made a reference to the fact that there have been full agents as young as eleven, if my memory serves, so while portraying kids as kids is a good and wise thing, it's a little weird if they seem too young and helpless compared to their peers. Kids are almost always smarter than adults give them credit for, anyway.

I am amused by the three Ss, Steve, Sasha, Shawn... and then Wallis.

Also, for posterity, the original "agent training" story.

~Neshomeh

Re: Permission granted! by Meta on 2011-05-20 06:44:00 UTC Reply

Woop! *Does the victory dance*

Thanks very much, and thanks for the link too. Does anyone know of any other training stories around? I want to keep as close to PPC canon as I can.

Not that I'm a permission giver... by Elemarth on 2011-05-17 19:40:00 UTC Reply

I like it. It's a great idea for a spin-off. I've been wondering how recruited agents are trained (or not trained, as it seems to be most of the time), so I'd really want to read this.

Thanks by Meta on 2011-05-17 19:42:00 UTC Reply

I was really hoping to go for something completely different and the idea of training up raw recruits really appealed. It'll probably be a while before I send them out into live missions though.