Permission granted! by
Techno-Dann
on 2011-05-21 04:00:00 UTC
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Sorry about the wait. Consider yourself Permissioned, official, and etcetera, quod erat demonstrandum.
One quick note, though. The PPC really isn't allowed to operate against authors - they have Rights which their characters don't, and out-of-verse, there's miles and miles of difference between killing someone's fictional character and threatening them in person. So, yeah. It'd be easy enough to justify (They were OFU students who should have known better, and the visit was a "please don't" rather than anything more formal, perhaps), but please don't make a habit of going after authors instead of Sues. (It just causes problems.)
Critique by
DigitalSocrates
on 2011-05-20 18:38:00 UTC
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Disclaimer: I'm not a PG but here's my two cents anyway.
Start off with the bad first (there's not much of it):
1) Gillies' entrance into the PPC is unlikely. The PPC's jurisdiction doesn't stretch into World One, nor would they be likely to interrupt a DnD game. The PPC is more concerned with published works.
2) The intro is informative, concise and well written, but it's not funny. Not even situationally funny.
If you amend Gillie's character/backstory to have a bit more likely and maybe make some other tweaks so that humor creeps in more, this would be perfect.