Subject: "Legolas said IÂ’m afraid I canÂ’t becouse IÂ’m dying..."
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Posted on: 2011-04-11 21:40:00 UTC
"... and then Legolas died"
Yes. Also, great mission!
Subject: "Legolas said IÂ’m afraid I canÂ’t becouse IÂ’m dying..."
Author:
Posted on: 2011-04-11 21:40:00 UTC
"... and then Legolas died"
Yes. Also, great mission!
Agents Az and Boston take on one hell of a Lord of the Rings Sue -- and her slew of Uncanon Replacements.
Seriously. It's hard to even begin to believe that this is actually a fic. But it was on the Wiki under unclaimed, so, I did it.
*huge grin* This very story was the reason I left my first post on the board, back in July. It's been obsessing me like you wouldn't believe, monstrous piece of shit that it is. Really, I've been telling people about it. It feels so good to finally see the damn thing PPCed. And I gotta say, girl, you did a real good job. I kept giggling at this mission. I'm just glad you stopped the Sue before the monkey business came into play. Because that section was twenty different kinds of wrong. *pause* You know what? If Tolkien were still alive today, I'd be praying he'd never learn about fanfiction. The poor man would have never recover.
One tiny nitpick, if I may. "... and proceeded to pantomime raping the passive, fully clothed girl." Shouldn't that be "... and proceeded to pantomime rape"?
Now if you'll excuse me, I must go inform Clear Dawnlight, 'scuse me, Safireix, and Zelda-Queen of this mission. *storms off to do so*
I need some right now, or maybe Bleepka. Originally, I'd hoped that "Sary" must be a misspelling of sorry, since the author ought to apologize for that... THING. Thank you for killing it.
Whu? Wha? What thought process was going on here? As a Rings fan I thank you sincerely for sporking this fic.
Now is one of those times where I start wondering what the heck the people who write fanfiction like that are thinking. Don't they realize how dumb it is?
Anyway, really awesome job on the mission!
"... and then Legolas died"
Yes. Also, great mission!
From the episode where they have to enact an Ally McBeal homage and the Professor reads from the cue card: "Miss McNeal, I'm afraid I must decline your offer of marriage. For, you see, I'm dying. Cough, then fall over dead."
Are we sure someone wasn't taking cues from "legolas" by laura? 'Cause I gotta tell you, although it seems to diverge as it goes on, that opening sequence is darn similar.
I caught a couple of things you might want to fix:
1. “She… he… Oh.” Az the Legolas impersonator stepped out of the cadaver . . .
2. Before Az knew what was happening, Aragon had run Frodo through with his sword – which appeared to be a bad replica of the Movieverse Anduin –
Other than that, good work! I enjoyed the little glimpses into the agents' backstories. It gives them some depth without wallowing too much in drama (as I am constantly tempted to do >.> ).
I was going to suggest spending a little more time on why Boston got tossed around at the end of the mission, but fortunately something made me look over the intro, and lo and behold, it was explained. Still, with a reader base as constantly changing as this, it's not a bad idea to keep new readers in mind, as long as you don't try to contrive an explanation where it wouldn't make sense for the story or characters.
I am supposed to be working right now, so I'm afraid I'll have to leave it there. All in all, good job, and I'm looking forward to the next one. {= )
~Neshomeh
Thanks for catching those. >.
Anyway, thank you! I'm not entirely sure that the author wasn't taking cues from "legolas", but...
Anyway.
Yeah, I was tempted to wallow in drama for a while, but I figured that doing a little bit every once in a while for several missions is better than going all Srs.
Thank you for sporking that...that...THING. Are you sure it doesn't deserve the title "Legendary Badfic"? The sheer....the sheer BADNESS makes me think it does.
Surely, the PPC owes Az and Boston a great debt for their courageous sporking of that....THING.
Needs a NSFB warning. *shudder*