Subject: That fic seems awfully familiar...
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Posted on: 2011-04-11 18:27:00 UTC

Are we sure someone wasn't taking cues from "legolas" by laura? 'Cause I gotta tell you, although it seems to diverge as it goes on, that opening sequence is darn similar.

I caught a couple of things you might want to fix:

1. “She… he… Oh.” Az the Legolas impersonator stepped out of the cadaver . . .

2. Before Az knew what was happening, Aragon had run Frodo through with his sword – which appeared to be a bad replica of the Movieverse Anduin

Other than that, good work! I enjoyed the little glimpses into the agents' backstories. It gives them some depth without wallowing too much in drama (as I am constantly tempted to do >.> ).

I was going to suggest spending a little more time on why Boston got tossed around at the end of the mission, but fortunately something made me look over the intro, and lo and behold, it was explained. Still, with a reader base as constantly changing as this, it's not a bad idea to keep new readers in mind, as long as you don't try to contrive an explanation where it wouldn't make sense for the story or characters.

I am supposed to be working right now, so I'm afraid I'll have to leave it there. All in all, good job, and I'm looking forward to the next one. {= )

~Neshomeh

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