I'm currently following the Chuggaaconroy Let's Play of Okami, and I LOVE the game from what I've seen so far. Nice job with the mission!

I liked the super plothole in this mission; it makes sense that such a major change to the canon's past, and the major ripple effect it would have on the game's outcome, would manifest as a major, violent plothole. It was a cool idea to have Lore actually dive into it in order to correct the Sue's changes.

One thing I was left wondering: you implied that Ray's small dog form was a disguise for the fic. Is Ray's normal form something other than human? I'm just curious, since Lore and Ray both became dogs.

I'm glad you gave this atrocity a good sporking. I love Ōkami, it's beautiful world, diverse characters and emotions... And Waka is my favorite character. He's sparkly, but in a good way. Unlike this tripe you have so wonderfully skewered.

You described the canon well at the start. Nice and simple.
I laughed at Waka's google-translated french, and I enjoyed watching Lore remove the "curse" on the Oina tribe. That was creative.

If I do get permission, I would like to spork an Okami fic of this caliber. You've inspired me. This cannot stand.

This is a pretty good mission. I don't know much about Okami, though...