Subject: Looks good...
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Posted on: 2010-10-21 01:09:00 UTC
I especially like the dynamic between your agents, and am eager to see more of them.
Subject: Looks good...
Author:
Posted on: 2010-10-21 01:09:00 UTC
I especially like the dynamic between your agents, and am eager to see more of them.
My agents have successfully completed a mission in the Wicked continuum! Here it is: http://firebird766.livejournal.com/1421.html
Also, an introduction for them: http://firebird766.livejournal.com/1095.html
Here's hoping I didn't do too badly!
I like these two. That fic made very little sense. It sounds like a good first target. It was kind of weird at first that Jenka kept carrying Chalk around, but then it got to the really funny stage.
I especially like the dynamic between your agents, and am eager to see more of them.
This is decent writing, and clearly isn't a first draft. Creative handling of the bit, too.
It took me a while to figure out Jenka's gender, but that's probably my fault for not reading the introduction.
*Applause*
I like the way your agents dealt with the bit-rapist. Usually, such a character would be killed in a mission, or just disappear with the canon's reassertion. But using the neuralyzer to make him into a normal person is a great idea! It makes sense, too; since a bit doesn't have much personality anyway, there's nothing wrong with changing it.
I don't know the first thing about the canon here, but I like to think I've come to know a well-written Mission when I see one. Considering this was your first, I'd say you've done yourself proud. Your Agents, too, have an entertaining dynamic about them; I'll be sure to keep tabs on them.
Again, very well done.