Subject: Extra pluggyness
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Posted on: 2013-05-09 21:27:00 UTC

(A Test! Oh, oh, did I pass? Did I?)

Well, I guess that answers my question of if anything has been written actually set in the Sundering itself :)

I think this is a great story, and the anonymous narrator was a nice choice. It makes it seem like the events themselves are so much more important than whoever happens to be telling them.

The actual sacrifice scene was very well done, that calm countdown seems vaguely reminiscent of... something, but I can't place it. Very good though, and some awesome Last Words. And the last line, with the narrator deciding against the name of the House of What Was in favour of honouring the Rhododendron's sacrifice, was fantastic.

One (very minor) thing that I noticed - the speech mark at the end of the 'We can repair this...' line looks like it's the wrong one (opening rather than closing) - that's something I've noticed Word has a tendency to do with dashes, the Smart Marks don't seem to treat them as text/punctuation.

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