Subject: Okay...
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Posted on: 2010-09-11 18:51:00 UTC

I'll officially ask for Permission in a couple days when I'm freed up from work obligations >> But here's the link to the fics for your evaluations:

<a href="http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6192696/3/Look
outSunyshoreCityHerecomesKariJones">http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6192696/3/LookoutSunyshoreCityHerecomesKariJones
This one is the Vaporeon-with-Hydro-Cannon girl. (That just REALLY irks me since it's not hard to look up the move and see that it's limited to the Water starters. It also goes against -all- competitive battling logic but that's not the point...) It's currently undergoing a rewrite, but I looked at the scene and that bit hasn't changed. Not to mention she managed to get Flint's Infernape's moveset wrong, and has -no- concept of how an Elite Four member would battle.

<a href="http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5412290/1/The
DaysatSinnohAcademy">http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5412290/1/TheDaysatSinnoh_Academy
This is the cold-but-beautiful one, and she's gotten a few things wrong. 1) Byron is not OOTP; 2) Crasher Wake should NOT be in school with Volkner and Candice at the same time; 3) Roark is NOT a coward; 4) Mysterious "Iris" pulling out a sword for NO BLOODY REASON; 5) It's just like every other Pokemon high school story; 6) She uses EMOTES in her SENTENCES. *Facepalm*

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