Subject: Sorry, but...
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Posted on: 2010-09-06 03:48:00 UTC
You lost me at "disguises are for losers." If it was meant to be a joke, you missed the mark.
To be frank, I wasn't terribly enchanted with the agents to begin with. I grant you that "humorless" can be funny, but I'm not seeing it in the writing sample; also, even the possible humor value of trying to get a large man into Stormtrooper getup was circumvented in a boring and deus-ex-machina-esque way. Anyway, how is a sixty-year-old man going to keep up with sixteen-year-old super-powered Sues and cope with the systemically taxing effects of badfic? Him having the mental age of a ten-year-old does not make it better; rather, it's kind of offensive. A special needs person does not a good agent make.
I just don't see their stories being very fun to read as it is, nor in keeping with the spirit of the PPC. Please give it some extensive thought and try again later.
~Neshomeh