Subject: Oh, I forgot
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Posted on: 2010-09-05 23:02:00 UTC
They're from the department of Floaters. Their first mission will be Every Fangirl's Dream by WickedSweet123, a regular case of Trans-Dimensional Snatching.
I'd like to request permission to create my own spin-off of the PPC...
My agents:
Name: Leroy Marks
Physical appearance: Tall (1m80), his features are always covered by his black armour
Personality: Rude, humourless, he hates badfic and is a Cardboard freak (He's addicted to the duplicator)
Equipment: He always wears Mandalorian shock trooper armor, and carries a Glock 34. He also has in his possession imperial stormtrooper armor (painted black).
He is a Mandalorian recruited from a Star Wars fanfic whose original name was Akaan (which apparently means 'War' in Mando'a). He was renamed Leroy Marks (which is clearly not a typical mandalorian name).
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Name: Quentin Travis
Physical appearance: He is a fat, bald man whose age is around 60 years old.
Personality: He is curious (far too curious according to his partner), hyperactive; his mental age is similar to the one of a ten years old kid.
Equipment: He was given stormtrooper armour and a Glock 34 by his partner, and that's what he uses.
He was recruited from the Real World because he left constructive criticism on his badfic reviews.
Writing sample (It's very short, tell me if you need something bigger).
You lost me at "disguises are for losers." If it was meant to be a joke, you missed the mark.
To be frank, I wasn't terribly enchanted with the agents to begin with. I grant you that "humorless" can be funny, but I'm not seeing it in the writing sample; also, even the possible humor value of trying to get a large man into Stormtrooper getup was circumvented in a boring and deus-ex-machina-esque way. Anyway, how is a sixty-year-old man going to keep up with sixteen-year-old super-powered Sues and cope with the systemically taxing effects of badfic? Him having the mental age of a ten-year-old does not make it better; rather, it's kind of offensive. A special needs person does not a good agent make.
I just don't see their stories being very fun to read as it is, nor in keeping with the spirit of the PPC. Please give it some extensive thought and try again later.
~Neshomeh
They're from the department of Floaters. Their first mission will be Every Fangirl's Dream by WickedSweet123, a regular case of Trans-Dimensional Snatching.