Subject: Mission Up!
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Posted on: 2010-06-15 16:51:00 UTC
Another Danny and Laura mission in the Left 4 Dead continuum. The assassins must deal with a Full Life Consequences-type 'parody,' which pits them against a rather bizarre Stu.
http://vgdivision.livejournal.com/1505.html
...the thought of a zombie-killing sandwich is pretty funny.
The fic's still crap, though.
And well done for reading that. God knows I couldn't have.
I like. xD Especially since I looked the original up, and was able to laugh twice: once at the sheer unadulterated fail, and a second time at your mocking of the sheer unadulterated fail.
Sammich... I wouldn't mind eating that Stu. If you don't want 'im, I'll take him... Sammiches are good.
I appreciate your OVER 9000! reference.
I actually like the original squirrelking trollfics, but this one sounds like a badly done attempt at mimicking them. The sentient sandwich thing was a funny touch.
There are a few mistakes I want to point out in the opening scene:
"'every game every made'" should be "every game ever made"
"then you this was coming" should be "then you knew this was coming"
"said nothing as halfheartedly" should be "said nothing as he halfheartedly"
Also, since Danny wouldn't finish it, I will:
IT'S OVER NINE THOUSAND!
I was the beta reader, I can't believe I didn't pick up on those. Gah. Fail betareader is fail.
I could read it a thousand times, you could read it a thousand times, but the moment it gets put on the Internet someone will find an error we both missed. C'est la vie.
Tell Danny that he has my deepest sympathy. That was awful. Though, I suppose the idea of a giant sandwich is mildly amusing. It reminds me of that one guy from the show Word Girl.
Anyway, good job killing the thing. Hope next time the mission makes Laura go berserk. Danny's been feeling the brunt of the badfic horror, or so it seems.
--anamia