Subject: Re: Mission Up!
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Posted on: 2010-06-15 21:18:00 UTC

I actually like the original squirrelking trollfics, but this one sounds like a badly done attempt at mimicking them. The sentient sandwich thing was a funny touch.

There are a few mistakes I want to point out in the opening scene:

"'every game every made'" should be "every game ever made"
"then you this was coming" should be "then you knew this was coming"
"said nothing as halfheartedly" should be "said nothing as he halfheartedly"

Also, since Danny wouldn't finish it, I will:
IT'S OVER NINE THOUSAND!

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