Subject: Very nice. Permission Granted. :)
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Posted on: 2010-06-04 00:22:00 UTC

I like it. Your agents are a nice contrasting pair and your writing sample made me chuckle. I don't know a thing about Kryptonians but you explained every relevant detail without bogging down the narrative, and that's not only hard to do but often entirely neglected, so I particularly applaud you for that. Well done.

One tiny, probably entirely irrelevant thing:
to make sure her thumb is tucked under her fingers when she punches someone
You mean that the thumb is pressed against the outside of the knuckles and pulled out of the way, right? Not tucked inside the fingers? I did TKD for years and the one thing my teachers always said is that if you have your thumb wrapped up in your other fingers when you punch, you're going to break it. Just want to make sure.

That said, go forth and write! (Well, once the debate of the songfic department is over...) Welcome to the PPC! :D

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