Subject: I'll second the blehs, but..
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Posted on: 2010-04-20 19:23:00 UTC
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Hoo boy. This story, you guys... It makes me yearn for RL brain bleach.
From what I saw from a cursory read-through, this story is very bad. It's a Saix/Demyx Mpreg story with some Axel/Roxas on the side. Everyone is horribly OOC (including a caring and sympathetic Xemnas), time is put through the wringer (ten years in two chapters!), the prose tends toward the purple end of the spectrum and there are superfluous ellipses everywhere.
The kicker for me, though, was the final chapter. There is a touching scene where Axel gets a little "close" with Saix and Demyx's son (who is ten years old at this point). We're talking very bad touch.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5057354/1/BrokenTheMelodious_Diviner
When there's another thread on the top of the page showing badfic, it's usually a better idea to post it in that thread as well to conserve front page space instead of bumping a later thread off needlessly.
This story is like the condensation of all the awful, creepy things that typically appear in Org. XIII slashfic. I can't even read this kind of crap without feeling a little sick.
Hooo boy. I suppose it's too much to hope that you intend to kill it and the rest of us can forget about it and ignore our stupid senses of obligation?