Subject: Re: First Co-Mission (with Maslab)
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Posted on: 2010-03-20 19:25:00 UTC
... I take it you two are part of the Department of WTF? I'm still slightly stunned by this. It DEFINITELY had to die.
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First Co-Mission (with Maslab) by
on 2010-03-17 03:43:00 UTC
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Here is the first of (hopefully) many Missions from myself and Maslab.
*WARNING* The Fanfiction has NSFW and NSFB content. Had it not been the entire focus of the piece we would have skipped it. There is minor swearing and adult content.
Mission Link: http://docs.google.com/View?id=df4qxpsx0hhxpjff3
Fanfiction Link: <a href="http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3096379/1/FirstEncounter">http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3096379/1/First_Encounter
Notes: Please don't read unless you have copious amounts of Bleeproducts nearby. This mission was written in the small hours of the morning (1-4 AM-ish) back in January and was only just finshed. Many thanks to Gattsuru for braving this. The only upside to this fic is it's length and it's lack of SPAG issues, it makes up for it via brain-breakage though. -
(Jaw drops) by
on 2010-03-21 17:42:00 UTC
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The giant squid did WHAT to Hogwarts?!?!?!?
Oh dear Glod... And here I'd thought I'd seen everything... -
Re: First Co-Mission (with Maslab) by
on 2010-03-20 19:25:00 UTC
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... I take it you two are part of the Department of WTF? I'm still slightly stunned by this. It DEFINITELY had to die.
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What the freck? *laughs* by
on 2010-03-18 15:12:00 UTC
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I actually thought that fic was kind of funny. But your sporking is funnier by far.
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What is this, I don't even-- by
on 2010-03-18 06:26:00 UTC
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How...why...how?
How did you even read this? Just the parts you quoted in the mission were enough to make me want to shotgun myself in the heart. Twice. You, sirs (or madams, or persons), have stomachs of tempered steel.
And now, I will go back to assuming that fic was an intentionally cracky parody, and not something the author wrote for personal enjoyment. -
For future reference... by
on 2010-03-17 10:13:00 UTC
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It would be appreciated if you could tell us, at the very least, what fandom your mission is for in your plug, preferably in your heading - I usually don't bother to open links if I don't know I'm going to recognise the fandom. Details such as department and focus characters would be good, too.
And that fic... ow. Someone's mind is terribly twisted. Though considering the incident in OFUM, I could see the squid taking a career as an actor...
Ah, big explosion. I like that big explosion - and you had every cause to create one. :)
(You still have a few little tech errors, though - missing a full stop after and a pad with a Big Red Button, for example. Nothing serious, but you should probably do another round of beta-reading next time.) -
Re: First Co-Mission (with Maslab) by
on 2010-03-17 08:17:00 UTC
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You know your opening AN contains a horrible tense shift, right?
Also, there are a few moments where it's kind of obvious you're trying to avoid the Pronoun Problem.
"Giant squid bang Hogwarts."
I would read further and complain about more, but that sentence put too many images in my head, and none of them end in a good place, and oh Glod giant squid WHY my brain may never stop screaming. -
Re: First Co-Mission (with Maslab) by
on 2010-03-17 08:10:00 UTC
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Glad to see someone finally killed that fic. I didn't think of charging a building with public masturbation.
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o_O by
on 2010-03-17 03:55:00 UTC
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A very strange 'fic indeed.
I'm highly entertained by the killing of it. Nice, straightforward, amusing.
I might have preferred a bit less cut-and-paste, though, and more Agent interaction.
Still, definitely fun times. For readers, not Agents, one thinks. And explosions are sweet.
I look forward to other missions. -
Thank Goodness! by
on 2010-03-17 05:06:00 UTC
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I still can''t believe you suckered me into reading the original fic over on the chat. I'm sending this message from the Bleepka Fountain.
Anyway, nice job killing it. Boom! I like explosions. :D