Subject: Re: Official Permission Request
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Posted on: 2010-02-23 19:37:00 UTC
A few nit-picks first - needs a beta-read! Mostly punctuation issues :) And your stories are cool, but I found it a little hard to get into them at first because the narrative just sort of plunges in without any lead-in or intro.
Agent Cali's superpowers ... they're comical, but as you point out, totally useless. I'd suggest trying to work them in in a way that makes them juuuuust this side of useful - i.e., they can be used but they backfire, rather than just being impossible. He sounds like a LOT of fun though, with the talkative neat freak thing going on. Quite a nice contrast from Miah, who seems like a more typical PPC agent.
So I'm going to say Permission granted. Do you have a first target picked out? I realise I probably won't know the fandom, but can I give it a beta before you publish it?
- Trojie, stretching her new wings.