Subject: Thanks.
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Posted on: 2009-11-25 17:46:00 UTC
Thank you.
And yeah, those first few chapters were my first writings, so I know there's a lot of inconsistencies with later chapters. I need to go through and rewrite them.
As for the question on whether the fic follows canon (that seems to be what your question is), the wiki has strict canon-friendliness rules, so other users let me know if there's a problem.
The time has come, so I am asking for it.
I have many example of my writing, most of them on the Halo Fan Fiction Wikia. Here is the story that's gotten me the most good reviews.
One of my agent would be Agent Jiashu. The name is that of a friend of mine, and I plan on having his agent character mirror him as he is in reality: sarcastic, witty, and naive.
The other is Agent Jake. He's a young Orbital Drop Shock Trooper, but is still able to offer good advice and skill to Jiashu, especially during combat scenarios. He's young and sarcastic, much like Jiashu, but has been through several grueling battles against the Covenant. As these two agents will be taking on super-soldiers and incredibly large and powerful alien warriors I think they need all the help they can get.
Both agents would be assassins in the Department of Mary Sues. It would also appear that they would be the first Agents in the Halo Division.
The first mission I would do would be on this fanfic. It involves at least one Sue and, at the very minimum, a heavily influenced Spartan. I'm fairly certain she's a Sue, too, although someone more experienced might want to help me figure it out.
If you have any questions, please ask.
Sorry this took so long. We had an early Thanksgiving with my fiance's parents, so I didn't have a lot of time.
Anyway, I don't know much about Halo, but speaking just to the writing, you'll want to watch out for little errors of punctuation and spelling, and make sure you're clear about who's who. In the second chapter, you don't really introduce Wings at all, you just drop the name in. I had to guess that it was the same boy from the first chapter, which I couldn't do until it was clear that you were following him and not just mentioning the name in passing. Remember, the readers are smart, but they can't read your mind. {= )
As for the fic, I can't really help because I don't know the fandom. Sorry. Good luck with the mission.
~Neshomeh, who wonders where the other PGs are.
Thank you.
And yeah, those first few chapters were my first writings, so I know there's a lot of inconsistencies with later chapters. I need to go through and rewrite them.
As for the question on whether the fic follows canon (that seems to be what your question is), the wiki has strict canon-friendliness rules, so other users let me know if there's a problem.