Subject: Hoom! Do not be hasty! (Need another PG)
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Posted on: 2009-01-29 21:14:00 UTC

... yeah, couldn't resist that. Let's see now.

I'm rather worried by the description of Mulhoon as a "legend". In fact, this section:

Mulhoon was something of a legend in the PPC, as being near impossible to disturb. He was regularly sent on missions to the most graphic fics, and rarely if ever actually took Bleeprin.

... concerns me. It is possible to make a 'Sue or 'Stu in the PPC, and being undisturbable is one way to do so. So is claiming to be legendary -- I did that once, but later rewrote that passage to indicate that the agents in question thought /themselves/ legendary, while leaving the actual state of affairs open. The obvious question is, if he's a legend, why has no one ever talked about him before now?

So I don't know. On the flip side, I do like Render. He's well characterised, and looks like he could develop well. So... yeah, I don't know. Those are my comments, but I'm not going to make a decision. I'll leave it open for someone else to say yea or nay. Or yay! or neigh! depending on their preferences.

hS

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