She's from a role-play based on Battle Royale, but she's not, in fact, a character from any officially published work? I just want to make sure I understand it right. If you frequently have a temptation to lift minor characters from canon works (Agent Cham?), I'm going to tell you right now to get over it.

The writing sample could use a little bit of work, but it's nothing a beta wouldn't catch: a few commas where there should be periods and a few places where it wasn't clear who was supposed to be speaking. Also, please avoid interrobangs. They tend to be more annoying than anything else, and I'm pretty sure none of the Flowers would ever indulge in them. Other than that, I enjoyed it. {= )

Pending your response, this is a tentative Permission Granted.

Taking off my PG Hat now: mind if I borrow Nurse Barker for a story set around the Invasion? He seems entertaining. *g* (Your response to this particular question will not affect your status vis a vis Permission.)

~Neshomeh