Really good. by
lynxihez
on 2008-08-01 18:15:00 UTC
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I wouldn't be able to organise something like that, so well done.
Minor nitpick, though - I always thought it was "Blah blah blah!" she said, rather than "Blah blah blah!" She said, if that makes sense. Apart from that, though, I didn't spot any major mistakes. Keep it up! :D
yay for cameos! by
Paddlebrains
on 2008-07-31 02:07:00 UTC
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I will admit to not having yet been sober enough to read through it properly, but I did peek to check the cameos, and they did make me grin. Someone kick me to remind me to read again when sober.
I do recall a couple of grammar moments that made my inner Nazi tense; if the same happens when I get around to the sober reading, I'll be volunteering beta services next time. However, it is entirely possible I imagined them, as I totally could not quote any, what with being not sober then and not sober now. *makes mental note to start checking the Board before hitting the bottle in future*
I propose a toast! by
WikiMaster
on 2008-07-30 13:26:00 UTC
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And a Pie-Eating contest!
YES! by
Sedri
on 2008-07-29 07:15:00 UTC
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Artic, you spoil me. *squees*
Molto bene by
Just_theDoctor
on 2008-07-28 23:50:00 UTC
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(Means "very good" in Italian, I think.)
[Stretches arms] I approve. by
Selene Morgana etc etc
on 2008-07-28 22:23:00 UTC
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I've been needing something to do ever since that hS character gave up on me, so I'm very grateful for the chance at an outing. Any time you need me to drop a storm on someone's head, look me up.
Unless it's an Agent. I get in trouble for that.
~SMLPXW
Well done! by
Luana Starlight
on 2008-07-28 21:14:00 UTC
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Congratulations on a job well done.
Nice one... by
Ansela
on 2008-07-28 17:05:00 UTC
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just one nitpick though.
Kobayashi is Risa's family name, not her given name. Ansela tends to ignore family names in conversation, unless there are two people with the same given name in the area. In which case she's just as likely to come up with a wholly inappropriate nickname as she is to use family names.
Congratulations, it's a mission! by
Cassie Cameron-Young
on 2008-07-28 14:09:00 UTC
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Nice work. I'm willing to beta for any more missions you write.