Subject: Bookmarked
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Posted on: 2014-08-09 16:01:00 UTC
I’ll try to look at it when I find the time, maybe in a week or three.
HG
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Looksee requested by
on 2014-08-07 19:34:00 UTC
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This mission is about ready for the peatmoss stage. That's when I ignore it for a month unless I have an inspiration involving it. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rrWXSxcKdjKIXW7xOpM0OXEfM7bucpiS5XJYhfXHg/edit?usp=sharing
If someone could please give it a loose rundown for problems while it's fermenting?
Some specific things I'm wondering about...
Should I include the verbose intel report at all since I'm skipping so much as "meh"? Should the report go at the end? Should the incomplete version of the intel report stay that way, since that's where the agents are killing it? (Basically those three chapters are the cancer of a passable 20-chapter story.) Or should I have it continue, possibly with a spy-switch.
For the mission itself... I don't think the fried chicken incident was too bad, neither is the ice-cream parlor bit that I skipped. Should I explore these deeper? -
Um... by
on 2014-08-12 03:08:00 UTC
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I hate to have to bring it up, but I'm really not OK with you sharing and asking for commentary on PPC fic without Permission. I get that you're excited about your characters - I completely know the feeling! But could you please run them around and get to know them in something that isn't PPC?
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Bookmarked by
on 2014-08-09 16:01:00 UTC
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I’ll try to look at it when I find the time, maybe in a week or three.
HG