Subject: Oh, yay!
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Posted on: 2014-05-21 18:47:00 UTC
Was my reaction when I saw this post.
Favourite lines:
The man blinked. “Lion? What lion?”
The man - Makalaurë - grinned, his teeth white, his eyes dark. “Me.”
Susan calling herself "Susan the Socialite".
“Relax,” Susan said, making sure of her grip. “It’s only a field point.”
The wound was oozing blood, and she considered the hem of her skirt for a long moment - but there was no point ruining good clothes.
“If you want it in the simplest of terms - I’m an elf. A very old elf.”
“That’s two questions,” Susan pointed out, “and they will both have to wait. I need to support your arm.”
“Why did you try to kill me? You’re clearly not a bloodthirsty maniac.”
Makalaurë gave her a tight smile. “I wouldn’t count on that."
For a moment she stared in disbelief, then sat bolt upright. “How did it get this late?”
“The usual way, I imagine,” Makalaurë said. “Is there a problem?”
“Are all Eldar this unpleasant?” she asked.
“Only around mortals,” Makalaurë replied cheerfully. “Or should I say, only around mortals who shoot them in the leg.”
“Why couldn’t you have broken your right shoulder?” Susan had demanded, as yet another hop went wrong and nearly dragged her down on top of him.
“Because I’m contrary.”
Susan felt her mouth drop open. “You want to sleep on top of me?” she demanded.
“A jewel,” he said tersely. “I tried to claim it. It… didn’t like that.”
That, Maglor, is quite the understatement.
“No,” Susan admitted, not opening her eyes. “It’s annoying.”
Her petulance is hilarious.
To the east lay home, and a fairly ridiculous level of inherited wealth. All her friends, her possessions, her entire life. To the west lay an immortal, conceited elf, exiled to the borders of civilisation, and - lest she forget - liable to wandering off with no warning. It should have been no contest.
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Oh, this was perfect. If I could, I probably would have quoted the entire thing, but I'll have to be satisfied by the frankly ridiculous amount of quotes I put here. As you can see, I enjoyed the snark immensely, and I love your characterisation of both of them, and the entire thing was so wonderful and not what I expected yet exactly what I expected at the same time, and the little detail that they didn't share their life stories but only the little things, becasue of course that's how it would go...
Oh, and I literally laughed aloud in delight when I read the ending. That was perfect.
(Please put it on FF.net so I can favourite it and have easy access? Please?)
-Aila