Subject: Concrit
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Posted on: 2014-05-03 01:06:00 UTC

There should be a scene break where the story transitions into the Cafeteria (i.e., somewhere around the line "But you still know people, right?") As it is, I do not know which scene the aforementioned line falls into, and also, I only figure out that the scene has changed from the RC t the Cafeteria when the next paragraph tells me that I'm in the cafteria—as it was, I was left wondering where "Estelnar" came in.

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