Puella Magi Madoka Magica Minis

Puella Magi Madoka Magica Minis by Ugolino on 2014-04-11 05:06:00 UTC

Re: Puella Magi Madoka Magica Minis by Desdendelle on 2014-04-11 13:11:00 UTC Reply
1. There're some of Sergio Turbo and Firemagic's missions.
  2. PMMM minis are mini-Charlottes.
  Also, here, have this cup of Elysian Tea. It won't try to eat you, I promise!

That's suspiciously specific... by Ugolino on 2014-04-11 18:48:00 UTC Reply

But never let it be said I turned down free tea.

*takes the cup*

Well... by Desdendelle on 2014-04-11 23:38:00 UTC Reply

Since it's Elysian Tea you're fine. If it was Stygian Tea, on the other hand...

Oh my God, it's you again! by Herr Wozzeck on 2014-04-11 12:51:00 UTC Reply

Welcome back! I was wondering where you had gone off to!

And wait, bad SI PMMM fanfiction?

*checks link*

...

I might just make an MST of it elsewhere on the internet. Lemme at it!

Thanks! by Ugolino on 2014-04-11 18:19:00 UTC Reply

MST away; Madokami knows it needs it. Dibs on the PPCing though!

It's yours! by Herr Wozzeck on 2014-04-11 21:02:00 UTC Reply

I don't have any agents in that division of the DMS anyway.

Welcome back! by Outhra on 2014-04-11 05:28:00 UTC Reply

(wheels out the welcome-back pastry table) It's been a while since I had the opportunity to bring this out. Take anything you like!

Wow, I haven't seen a character claiming to be one-third something in a while. How does the fic rationalize the inclusion of dragons? Or does it even try?

Puella Magi Madoka Magica minis are mini-Charlottes, and unless either I'm missing something or the wiki doesn't have all of the links that it should, we've only had two missions in that continuum.

I think I read one of these. by Sergio Turbo on 2014-04-11 19:41:00 UTC Reply

Oh, and welocme back Ugolino!

Anyways, the guy who wrote this has a lot of potential as a writer - in fact, the first half of the one I read (the one based on the Rebellion movie) was surprisingly good to the point that I linked it to Desdendelle and Firemagic.

Then the guy revealed hiself as part dragon ad part vampire (acquired, actually - he was born as a normal human. Still, I'm pretty curous to know how does he know the exact percentages...) and seduced Homura. I was like "no, no, WTF are you doing? You were supposed to fix her not bed her!"

I left a review, hoping to help him with some constructive criticism, but didn't receive an answer.

I didn't see the potential... by Ugolino on 2014-04-11 23:11:00 UTC Reply

But then again I had an unfair advantage in that I'd suffered through his earliest fic so I knew what was coming. The out of character isn't Homulucifer being Homulucifer: it's what he actually thinks the character sounds like.

The initial grasp was decent, it worsened. by Sergio Turbo on 2014-04-12 09:28:00 UTC Reply

Not perfect, though - Homura doesn't want Madoka to reciprocate her love - she just wants her safe.

And Madoka loving everyone exactly equal is bad too, 'cause even our friend-to-all-living-things ex-Goddess doesn't work that way. I mean, what was the naked space hugs scene all about? Madoka recognizing Homura as a very special, very close friend. You can't claim that Madoka loves her as much as she loves the perfect stranger at the other side of the world afterwards.

So basically one of the main conflicts of this story, while an interesting one, actually doesn't exist in canon and in fact looks like it was just an excuse to break the HomuMado pairing.

The SI character looked interesting in the beginning, he had his "bad" sides but they were treated as such by the other characters so it was fine. Until Chapter 3 it still was a pleasant read.
Then he transformed in his dragon form in chapter 4, and things went downhill from there. In chapter 5 I was like "wtf is happening now I liked the story how it was in the beginning". In chapter six I was facepalming (in fact, I skipped the sex scene completely because, well, only knowing that it was happening was enough to disgust me).

I left a still fairly positive review in the hope that it would make the author more likely to take up my offer for concrit - on a technical level his writing looked pretty good to me, it's such a shame that it is used for this kind of fics.

Thanks! Also, link to terribad story by Ugolino on 2014-04-11 05:35:00 UTC Reply

Considering the thread subject, I think I'll have some cake. Many thanks for the welcome and the information!

I was thinking the same thing; talk about your classic Sue (Stu) tropes. That was the least of this story's problems though: Homura's out of character by line three and unrecognizable halfway down the first page. The author's rather disturbing views, character assassination (quite literally in the case of poor Mami), and tendency to BABBLE about things we'd rather not learn about himself pale in comparison to the sheer creepiness that makes for a story that turned my stomach in a way most Legendary Badfic didn't.

Homura and the others rapidly become unrecognizable- and not even character replacements deserve what happens to the cast of this story. The unjustified ancestry is the least of the issues with this one.

WARNING: NSFW, NSFB, Not Suitable For Anyone Dear God Why Does This Exist:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/7713694/1/Homura-Afterstory