Subject: Well, let's see what we've got.
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Posted on: 2014-02-03 04:32:00 UTC

A pony and a lizard. Interesting combination. It is nice to see some more non-human agents, though your unicorn seems to like looking human. I like the "no nonsense" vs "rules are meant to be ignored" personalities. No real complaints here.

Your writing sample looks pretty good, if a little bit on the melodramatic side. The SPaG is in good working order. You do have a tendency to repeat information that you just told us, though (the public persona bits in the first few paragraphs, for instance). Keep an eye on that as you continue to write.

As far as your choice of badfic, I applaud the choice to have your Floaters taking on a non-Sue story right out of the gate. Also, did the author forget that these two hold the Crests of Friendship and Courage? Those are supposed to be their strengths, and this author has turned that on its head.


So, final verdict: Permission Granted and happy hunting.

-Phobos

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