Subject: (I'm so nervous..!) (nm)
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Posted on: 2014-02-03 03:52:00 UTC
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Permission Request by
on 2014-02-03 03:50:00 UTC
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My Agents:
PENCHANT is a unicorn bearing a resemblance to Twilight Sparkle, recruited from a My Little Pony badfic, who uses a D.O.R.K.S to maintain a human form. She's a very logical, no-nonsense individual who enjoys knitting, reading, writing, and taking care of strange creatures. She's not too good socially and tends to be blunt, resulting in her not having very many friends. She was partnered with Akishme the Argonian in hopes that she could keep the childish lizard in check. That, surprisingly, was a success, and, as long as Penchant can have alone time once in a while, the two get along great. She gets envious of Akishme's abilities to make friends with just about everyone from time to time, though. They are both in the Department of Floaters.
(More on Penchant here.)
AKISHME is an upbeat Argonian female, who prefers cracking jokes to cracking heads during a mission (though she wouldn't say no to doing both). She comes from Cyrodiil -a shack on the Imperial Waterfront, to be exact- and can be fiercely protective of her home continuum, preferring not to tackle missions concerning the Elder Scrolls world. She will do almost anything to have a good time, often at the expense of others. She has little to no concern for rules; isn't getting around them half the fun anyway? She's an over-confident, fun-loving person, though she is quick to anger if you happen to say all the wrong things. When angry, she's sure to let everybody know, backing up her rage with a handful of magic spells and the blade of her Daedric sword.
(More on Akishme here.)
A sample of my writing can be found here (it was written when I was coming off my Mario Puzo addiction, please bear with me).
I intend to take on Soccer Star extraordinaire as my first mission. -
Well, let's see what we've got. by
on 2014-02-03 04:32:00 UTC
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A pony and a lizard. Interesting combination. It is nice to see some more non-human agents, though your unicorn seems to like looking human. I like the "no nonsense" vs "rules are meant to be ignored" personalities. No real complaints here.
Your writing sample looks pretty good, if a little bit on the melodramatic side. The SPaG is in good working order. You do have a tendency to repeat information that you just told us, though (the public persona bits in the first few paragraphs, for instance). Keep an eye on that as you continue to write.
As far as your choice of badfic, I applaud the choice to have your Floaters taking on a non-Sue story right out of the gate. Also, did the author forget that these two hold the Crests of Friendship and Courage? Those are supposed to be their strengths, and this author has turned that on its head.
So, final verdict: Permission Granted and happy hunting.
-Phobos -
Congratulations! (nm) by
on 2014-02-05 19:11:00 UTC
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Congratulations! (nm) by
on 2014-02-05 03:17:00 UTC
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Yay! by
on 2014-02-03 19:59:00 UTC
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I'm so happy, thank you! I don't know what to say, but I'm excited to begin work on my first mission! I probably won't be excited once I start reading it, though, hah.
Thanks for the congratulations, guys! Means a lot~ -
Well Done! (nm) by
on 2014-02-03 15:48:00 UTC
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Congratulations! I can't wait to read your fic! =oD (nm) by
on 2014-02-03 11:25:00 UTC
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(I'm so nervous..!) (nm) by
on 2014-02-03 03:52:00 UTC
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