I firmly believe in something called a Sue Event Horizon, much like a black hole's even horizon - when an OC crosses that boundary, there's no going back. I'm quite confident that my friend has yet to cross the line yet, but he's approaching. Initially, he was very awkward with his writing, and while it IS improving, he's also begun to slip in his self-checks. It's entirely possible he eventually starts lying to himself and SOON, which would send him past the Sue Horizon and I'd need to terminate the fic when it became a badfic and it'd be messy all around. I've had to do it before... it wasn't pleasant.

All in all, his OC isn't quite a Sue yet, though I think he might be getting too close to that line for comfort. That's why I tried to see if any Touhou fans here could possibly read the fic and see if it's beginning to waver too much in his favour.

In effect, the fic is split up into halves at the moment; a war waged by most of the canon characters in their home territory, and the OC himself and some of the main characters working to defeat the one who started the war. It doesn't SEEM like a Sue birthplace, but the main perspective is told from the OC's point of view, which leaves us confused as to whether or not it counts as keeping them in the spotlight for too long. The two stories are somewhat separate, though I'm expecting to converge soon.

As a side note, we've set the OC up for a fall with a very, very painful impact. By the usual characteristic of a Sue, this shouldn't add to it (hopefully), though we're slated towards setting him up as a second story villain. My friend isn't too happy, but he should survive... Maybe they shouldn't forgive him. Would this be too brutal?

Last note, sorry about the wall of text.

Though really, anyone with a decent (maybe even less) grasp of the fandom and hopefully a Bachelor's in Anti-Sue would do. I'm not entirely sure if I should have come here or to the Sue Elimination Society, but I don't quite think he's reached the point the OC needs to be removed. That's why I posted it here.

If someone could read through it and perhaps give a critique on the Sue standing of his OC, it would certainly help to improve our work.