Subject: Re: Story
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Posted on: 2013-11-30 05:06:00 UTC

This was a nice, simple piece to read over dinner! You've got so many little details to show that this conversation takes place between psychic plants: the "food," the mental gestures, the way they talk about humanoid agents--even the server's lack of description, like they aren't even on the Flowers' minds. (Might like to hear a bit about the waitstaff at some point, though.)

I hope the "future Plot" bit was about Selene Windflower disappearing! I've always thought she was cool, even though I wasn't around reading her during her "active years." In general, it's nice to see less frequently-used agents and departments get mentioned and discussed.

One nitpick: I assume the League mentioned at the end is AHAIRQL, in which case it should be spelled Quiddich, not Quidditch.

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