Subject: RE:random stuff
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Posted on: 2013-08-20 01:05:00 UTC
Hmm I like the short story. Out of curiousness, Was the first one from a prompt idea? And is this from an orginal universe?
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Random stuff I've written thus far by
on 2013-08-19 23:49:00 UTC
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In terms of fiction I've currently marked as "finished", I've really only got two pieces of flash fiction. One was from two years ago for a creative writing class in school; another was for a BZP contest. In order-
FOR SCIENCE!!!1!: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KhaHqpbiUfw47OXUyLvSKzW1qXSIojJWYK5beccA/edit?usp=sharing
Visions: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Zmc5uKSpwPmQ5PY20PeUp36V1hsY1x3mCvRNTGX1hs/edit?usp=sharing">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Zmc5uKSpwPmQ5PY20PeUp36V_1hsY1x3mCvRNTGX1hs/edit?usp=sharing
(original post: http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=4978&page=3#entry281877 )
Also, a link to where I'm gonna post a collection of my stories as soon as said stories actually get finished: http://forum.watchthefootage.com/viewtopic.php?f=45&t=1155 -
Thoughts by
on 2013-08-20 14:41:00 UTC
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You did a fantastic job on these. It's amazing that you can create such sympathy for your characters in so few words. Very well-written and I'd love to read more of your work. :)
The only criticism I could possibly offer is that they're both too short. Even realizing that they were flash fiction or contest entries of some sort, I'd really like to see them extended. Like, did Angela feel any remorse about failing to protect Morgan? Does he die? And what happened leading up to the events in 'Visions?' Why do the characters need masks? What is a Toa, anyway? Or the other strange names, for that matter? Just a few thoughts if you were ever to add on.
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Well, they're both snapshots from larger mythoses by
on 2013-08-20 15:24:00 UTC
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so yeah, they're kinda out of context. I can tell you right now that, provided that I'm keeping them in canon, all that happened after FOR SCIENCE!!!1 was that Morgan got soaking wet and really bummed out, and Angela was all "oh my god you are such an idiot". As for Visions, that's a BIONICLE fanfic written for a BIONICLE fanfic contest, so naturally there's quite a bit of stuff out of context. For the record, Kanohi masks are necessary for Toa to function properly, Toa are essentially an entire subspecies of elemental cyborgs made for the sole purpose of being heroes, and the names are because, well, BIONICLE has weird names and stuff. :P
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Got it. Sorry! (nm) by
on 2013-08-20 15:47:00 UTC
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RE:random stuff by
on 2013-08-20 01:05:00 UTC
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Hmm I like the short story. Out of curiousness, Was the first one from a prompt idea? And is this from an orginal universe?
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Original, yes, although it technically didn't start that way by
on 2013-08-20 01:30:00 UTC
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It's based on a mythos derived from a Bionicle fanfic I used to collaborate on, albeit one that took place in an original universe with sentient sets. And yes, this was a prompt- type a story in less than 250 words with the theme of "plates". I decided to interpret it as armor plating.
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Intresting by
on 2013-08-20 00:22:00 UTC
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Have you considered a background for your first piece of writing?
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Funny thing about that by
on 2013-08-20 01:26:00 UTC
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It's actually based on the same universe that my two candidates for Agents come from, the main difference being that in the flash fiction, the characters are human instead of sentient toys (it started as a BIONICLE fanfic :P)