Subject: Reaction and edits
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Posted on: 2015-08-20 04:44:00 UTC

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Really?! You give us hope, only to leave us with a cliffhanger?! I don't know whether to call you a genius or a troll.

That aside, it was a pretty interesting interlude. Here's hoping that the Narrative Laws have some mercy on poor Rina/Aviator/[long Gallifreyan name that I dare not try to type]!

A few errors, though:

1) Once outside, she made her way to the alley several streets away where she had parked her TARDIS.
There's a comma missing before "where."

2) She was still coughing up artron energy, but she was stabilized enough Silvan had let her go to her own bedroom.
Missing word: "she was stabilized enough that Silvan had let her go to her own bedroom."

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