Subject: Good work!
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Posted on: 2015-08-13 20:20:00 UTC

...Is it bad that Rina's starting to scare me a little now? Cause she is. I hope she gets some help soon. (The joke about Rina's guinea pig was great, by the way, well done.)

Some things I noticed:
“...hiding from the Silence on the streets of New York.” Rina recited.
That period after "New York" should be a comma.

“No, seriously, who the flying ...nuggets is Victoria?
According to Wikipedia, Victoria (Waterfield) was a companion during the Second Doctor era. She first appears in "The Evil of the Daleks," where her scientist dad's time travel experiments attracted Dalek notice. What I don't understand is how a Suethor knows about Susan (who actually was the Doctor's granddaughter) but not about any other Classic Who companions. *shrugs*

His partner’s behavior was just going to have to wait.
Abrupt ending is abrupt. I assume there's a part two forthcoming?

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