Subject: Very nice!
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Posted on: 2015-08-11 22:01:00 UTC

I especially love what you did with the POVS. *snrf* I quite enjoyed the mission, and though I'm only familiar with Percy Jackson, I didn't feel totally lost all of the time. Two things, though.

“Hello, Chiron POV. “Wow. Does canon!Dionysus mess up names to that level, or is this just Flanderization? And Chiron rolling his eyes - that doesn’t seem quite in character for a centaur older than every modern civilization.”

Extra quotation mark.

“And how does Bianca’s soul show up on the map?” asked Theia, incredulity evident in each syllable

I thought for a moment that another agent had somehow come along and just escaped my notice up to that point, but she's not mentioned anywhere else.

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