Subject: Interesting report.
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Posted on: 2015-06-24 04:34:00 UTC
And when did Kyaris get the extra head? According to her entry in the PPC Wiki, she had seven heads, but here, she has eight.
So far, it's well written. One tiny error slipped through, though:
We already invoked the Ispace Accords with Jurisfiction; OFUU was the logical next step.
Shouldn't that be "OFUDisc"?
Rustic94 and friends, this one's for you. Everyone else, it's also for you: an Intelligence report in the Architeuthis style isn't just a summary of the fic, it's the story of how that summary came to be written.
PPC: Headstrong - The Games of Gods
This makes the third Intelligence Report fic I've written, which means I should probably give them a slot on my website. Kyaris will be so pleased.
(I think this is the first time the Division of Applied-and-theoretical Multiversal Physics has been mentioned in a story, rather than in technical documents; I'm sure they'll be delighted too.)
hS
And when did Kyaris get the extra head? According to her entry in the PPC Wiki, she had seven heads, but here, she has eight.
So far, it's well written. One tiny error slipped through, though:
We already invoked the Ispace Accords with Jurisfiction; OFUU was the logical next step.
Shouldn't that be "OFUDisc"?
OFUU has only appeared in the chapter titles for The Ispace Wars so far; it stands (or stood) for OFUs Underground, and is the defensive setup organised by the OFUs during the Wars.
Kyaris' extra head is deliberate too. It's been, what, nine years since Crashing Down? Much like our Time Lords, she's bad at self-preservation. (And why not? Let them get a hit in, and it makes you a better fighter!) There's no particular story behind it, though.
Thank you!
hS
I've to admit, writing Richard's, Alice's, Thumper's and Granite's scenes as I've okay enough knowledge of the setting.
I'll take your suggestions and advice to heart and start re-editing my parts to improve upon the story as much as possible.
Cheers for taking the time to give the Prologue a look over. I'll be sure to pass on the parts you suggested we work on and we are currently looking for a beta, awaiting responses from any we've contacted already.
The intelligence report was a fun read as well.
If you choose to read on, I hope you enjoy the story.
As I've stated previously, we have got plans for this fic, right now, it's just a matter of getting all of us online at the same time with spare time to write in.
ANd I also like how you put it - it's the PPC, expect the unexpected to mess up poor agents' lives.
That bit of calling in canons to help was interesting, too.