Glad to see those newbies Ari trained branching out. :)

Couple minor things...
"as you keep remind me"
Reminding.

"the Sue's all Stoic, but it still makes Subaru adore her."
Stoic isn't usually capitalized when it's referring to someone's personality/actions.

"With that, it shut itself down, smoke rising from its screen."
Um...don't CADs only shut themselves down/blow up when examining a truly terribad Sue/replacement/fic? This Sue seemed average by our standards. *shrugs*

"apart from more idiocy from Subaru..."
You've established earlier that Subaru isn't stupid like the Sue makes her out to be. Maybe you should indicate Subaru's OOC? *shrugs*

The grey-haired human looked at his brown-and-white TSAB Ground Armaments Service, disgust plain on his face.
I don’t know the Nanohaverse, so it may be possible that the disguised drone can look at its qualified-by-many-words "Service", but I get the impression that a word, like "uniform", may be missing there.

And apparently Navare’s CAD has a spelling problem ("StrikeS" or "StrikerS"?):

[Subaru Nakajima. Type 0 Combat Cyborg female. Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha StrikeS canon: protagonist. OOC 25%. Suggested action: removal of the Suefluencing Mary Sue.]

[Chrysae. Mary Sue. Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha StrikerS canon: OC. OOC: N/A. Suggested action: destruction.]

HG

I did not see that story coming. I'm liking it since I'm seeing all your works in progress.

Also, I've always wondered why people get too fancy in describing characters in fanfics. Isn't small descriptions like "Brown, flow hair" or "piecing green eyes" not enough?