Subject: I'm outlining a book I hope to publish, so...
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Posted on: 2015-05-31 18:54:00 UTC

I need feedback on the hookline. How to make it straight to the point, if it's interesting, if it's too wordy, etcetera. Here it is:

An exiled swordsman faces many forms of darkness and secrets that will change his life and the world forever.

I feel like it could be better, but I can't figure out exactly what to write.

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