Subject: Good work!
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Posted on: 2015-03-30 19:05:00 UTC
A little shorter than I'm used to, but not every mission has to be forty-something pages, y'know?
I liked the bit at the end where Lala's head landed in Valon's lap. XD Does that happen in canon, her head landing wherever the joke demands?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bBv3aInS8ZzW8E0Fu3odXU4JJVeAa9xcqCAbGrZWRks/pub
In which Kala and Valon stop the lemons before they start. And I finally get to show off what Kala can do.
This happens after the Rose Potter cleanup, even though that hasn't been fully written yet.
...just with a bit a flirting from Rachnera.
Shouldn’t this be "a bit of flirting"?
I don’t know Monster Musume, so my only comment is: read it, didn’t understand half of it, liked what I did understand, find nothing else to say.
HG
A little shorter than I'm used to, but not every mission has to be forty-something pages, y'know?
I liked the bit at the end where Lala's head landed in Valon's lap. XD Does that happen in canon, her head landing wherever the joke demands?
It's more or less how she's introduced.
See, her body finds Kimihito, but she's lost her head and can't find it in the dark. The rest of the chapter is spent headhunting.