Subject: Post derailment: Goodfic report
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Posted on: 2015-02-16 20:19:00 UTC
http://archiveofourown.org/works/3372653
A LotR fic centered around Faramir. A very good story from a very good author. She has a real talent for approaching a story sideways from the main characters/plot in a way that enhances them. Seriously, I don't think I've any of her stuff that is bad and several of them are on my all-time favorites list.
Frozen: The Emerald Soldier by "Desertstorm272", is a Frozen x Green Lantern crossover. I hate this fic almost as it had personally insulted me, so as soon I feel comfortable asking for Permission, I will personally go and rip it to shreds.
Main charges: A blatant Gary Stu, at least four Character Posessions/Replacements, killing a Main Canon Character, multiple Major Canon Breaks, complete disregard of the English language verb conjugation, being uninspired, predictable and, and... RRRRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHH!!! EDHELISTAR SMASH!!!!!!
Introducing Athreiens: Guardians of the Gods and the associated prequel fic He Who Has 1000 Names. Why have I cast Summon Greater Iximaz? Well, it's a crossover fic between, primarily, the Percy Jackson series and Doctor Who, specifically 12th and Clara. Characterisation is almost non-existent, the Stu shows up and is bestest at everything, I was able to point out canon flubs for a series I've only read the first damned book of (which itself was like nine years ago Jesus I am twenty-two I should not feel old), and then the cast of sodding DragonBall Whatever shows up and it contrives to get even worse. The Stu is atrocious, his girlfriend's a Sue as well, and the needless author's notes are hurled about with such abandon I fear for the agents' skulls. Oh, and Percy Jackson is kicked repeatedly in the genitals (sorry, "happy sacks") because comedy.
Riiiiiiinaaaaa, I've got you a preeeeeeesent~ >=oD
Hello, I am the author of this fanfic. the reason there is almost no characterization is because the prequel has most of it. Duly noted though, i'll try to add it more. All of the author's notes are mainly because I don't like to leave people hanging. I just like to give a reason for why I haven't been updating. Thanks for this though, I'll try to do better :)
I HEARD MY NAME AND CAME AT YOUR SUMMONS, THOUGH YOU PUNY MORTALS-
Oh, hi, Scapegrace. Wassup?
*reads through the fic*
*falls over convulsing*
I see PJO, HoO, KC, Doctor Who, Bionicle, Harry Potter, Star Wars, Torchwood, 39 Clues, Eragon... and that's just in the disclaimer and summary. Holy cripes. Fortunately, I am familiar with all of those except Bionicle and Torchwood (though I could probably figure out what's not canon if the PJO errors are anything to go by)- wait, did you say DragonBallZ? Never watched that, either. Hrm. I dunno, this looks like a doozy.
Hello, I am the author of these fanfics. They do have a lot of crossovers, mainly because I am planning on making this a big series. The ANs are mainly updates as to why I haven't been able to post, or just general updates to the story; I would rather give a reason to why I left my readers hanging than just leaving it at that. I am working as hard as I can to write it, so don't give up on me yet!
I think those are planned crossovers, since the only ones I was able to glean as definitely in place in the fic were Doctor Who and DragonBallZ, and the latter only show up in the last chapter of Athreiens. Well, the last proper chapter anyway; the author is bemoaning a variety of things over the course of the next four, which are entirely Author's Notes.
There's a lot of those in this.
"Timestopper", would be more closely rendered like "Χρονοστάσια;" (Chronostásia). Ώραπώμα (Órapóma) is so completely and absolutely wrong in so many ways, for starters, Greek words never have more than one tilde.
Hello! Thanks for this. I am not fluent in Greek so I had to use Google Translate, which I know already has many errors. I will update it asap.
Harry Gamer, by zed019 (rated T).
Harry goes otaku and plays Elder Tales.
Silly reason why Harry's suddenly living in the muggle world again, bad SPaG, a mishmash of canons without any reasons (seriously: Harry Potter, Log Horizon, Fate/stay night, Teen Titans, Pokemon, Warcraft, Naruto, Hunter x Hunter and Spongebob, possibly more), Sturry upstaging Log Horizon's protag and stealing his lines, Sturry being OP, etc.
-Rolls his eyes-
I need your thoughts on this: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/8857346/1/Witch-Heroine
I want to know how badly mangles the Harry Potter canon and see if it's worth the effort
Um. Okay. Not gonna lie, I have no knowledge of, what was it, Young Justice? So right from the get-go I've been a bit confused. I keep picturing Violet from The Boxcar Children and Wally from Pokémon. ^^;
Anyway, aside from the... Justice Team? being invited to participate in the Triwizard Tournament (seriously, wat? Why? Is either Beauxbatons or Durmstrang being left out in favor of the Justice Team?), the first major canon break I see is Wally claiming that Mrs. Weasley is his mother's sister. Nope— Mrs. Weasley had two brothers, Gideon and Fabian. That's it.
Then there's the sudden seemingly blatant disregard for the International. Statute of Secrecy. Usually the only acceptions made to this rule are for family members (how the Young Justice team is related, I don't know, so maybe it's not a charge).
I can only think of one instance where the twins referred to themselves as 'Gred and Forge', and that was as a joke in PS/SS. Hermione letting out little screams of horror seems OOC. And the twins seem very touchy-feely around Violet. I also have a hard time seeing them being friends with a Slytherin; they're a might biased.
And honestly, just because the most vocal Slytherins we see in the books hate Muggle-borns doesn't mean they all do. Don't you just love when fan writers take things to the extreme? Besides, she really doesn't act Slytherin-y, especially when she goes talking about her 'hero instincts'. That's definitely a Gryffindor trait.
After that, it looks like Violet just worms her way into the narrative and is generally obnoxious, but I can't get past chapter four because she's making me mad. "No shit Sherlock" and "Suck up", plus the fact she can speak ten languages, feels very much of Rose Potter. Bleagh.
Oh, and the twins never nearly jumped out of the box to impress the Veela. That was Harry and Ron. Then there was inserting of movie canon.
If you want me to take a closer look at this, I can... *grimaces and readies spork*
Wally is the red haired one with the googles and yellow suit.
The Team has no known name, you can leave at that.
Neither school is left out, that pretty much kills the "Tri" part of "Triwizard Tournament"(or maybe not, the chosen one is Robin[?]. But, hey! At least the Sue was not chosen...). Well, Wally's aunt, Iris; doesn't have another known sister either, besides Wally's mother. And Dick Grayson, Robin; has no older sister.
The International Statute of Secrecy is the reason about why the Team is there; in this continuum the Justice League sends the kids into the secret, undercover and borderline illegal missions that the League should not be seen doing (ie."covert operations"). Also, that's why Doctor Fate is acting as a liason, he's the most powerful wizard in the DC Multiverse, (he's some kind of "magical god" using a mortal as a host to interact with the world) and an Agent of Order and Balance, is his job to deal with magical crises that "muggles" shouldn't know about.
Although I do spect a great deal of skill and high notes from someone under the tutelage of the Goddamn Batman, I also think that ten languages is a bit much.
Overall the Young Justice side seems to be less hit by Suefluence, since everyone is acting pretty much in-character and the events can easily placed within the canon, after the end of Season 1.
So, after reading the four last paragraphs:
So much for an attempt to recruit a badfic character, huh? (Yes! I had hope that there was the possibility to recruit Violet!) Don't worry about this fic for now, concentrate your efforts in Rose Potter. ;D If you want spork it, I could help you with the charges on the Young Justice side of the fic.
Though, this leaves me with a question: Is impossible for a heroic Slytherin to exist?
I just want to put it out there that going after a fic primarily to steal the author's original character is maybe definitely a bit misguided. Firstly, if you want a superhero agent, why not make one up yourself? Use the same powers if that's what you want, but writing a mission just to recruit someone else's character seems like a lot of effort you could better spend coming up with your own.
Secondly, we should only spork the truly deserving, by which I mean so objectively terrible that even someone unfamiliar with the continuum/a should be able to spot problems with the writing. Two good reasons for this are 1) not picking on people for arbitrary reasons of taste, and 2) the fact that mediocre fics tend to make for mediocre missions.
~Neshomeh
I do have a large library of superhero OCs to choose from. (Although I want a HP wizard character...)
My primary objective is disentangling this badly done crossover. Second is the character developtment of my Agents. Saving the Sue is a very minor objective, if it cannot be salvaged, it will burn to ashes (literally!) and this will be added for the advancing of the second.
From what I read, it sounded like the Young Justice portions of the fic aren't that bad, so you were hoping the Potterverse bits would be so you could go in and recruit the character. Sorry if I misunderstood.
Maybe I'll take a look at the fic myself. I know HP and I've seen Young Justice, though my memory of it is pretty craptastic. Too easy to mix it up with all the other animated DCU stuff I've seen recently, and not all of it in the same continuity. ^_^;
~Neshomeh
The misunderstanding was probably my fault, 'cuz I was busy having my mind blown over the Bat-Family-Costumed-Vigilante/HP-Witch combination, to express myself clearly over my intentions.Though the character isn't exactly original, is just a genderbent, comicbook Dick Grayson with magic talent, named after Violet Parr from the Incredibles.
But anyway, you comment actually inspired me and made revise my Superhero OC Library and I found one that I haven't used in ages! A OC for a (Thank the gods!) never written badfic: A half-Kryptonian clone of Supergirl. Honestly the idea was dumb,the character was dumb and the continuum where the OC's stories where placed was dumb.
But regardless, I began to toy with the idea of a Kryptonian Agent, by rescuing that OC from Limbo and giving her some type of magical/otherwise unremovable power limiter/negator that will allow her partner/the Flowers/every single Eldar Agent to remove/give back her more exotic powers and reduce her physical might to human levels/recover her full Kryptonian might. By default, the settings would be no exotic powers/human-level might.
*points to Severus Snape and Regulus Black*
Both of them realized, before Voldemort's downfall, that he was, in fact, evil, and turned on him. Regulus actually figured out the secret behind Voldemort's 'immortality' and tried to destroy one of the Horcruxes. He got killed in the process.
Anyway, back to the case in point:
Ya think that the Sue is redeemable, or should we let Doctor Fate turn her in to a glittery stain in the Great Hall floor?
From what little I've seen, no. Unfortunately, I would need to read more to be sure. *rubs head* And I really don't have the stamina to do so now.
(Don't listen to her! She secretly wants to see this Sue burn!)
It would be a looooooong time before I even get to it, IF I even get to it...
Long answer: Effectively, Green Lanterns are chosen by the Rings upon the death or retirement of the previous one. Is astronomically rare (pun intended) that children of former Lanterns become Lanterns themselves, as our good friend Amon Sur can attest; with only two known cases, Arisia and Soranik Natu. And even rarer still, is an underage Lantern being chosen with the only known case being Arisia, again; being the physical and mental equivalent of twelve. Arisia is a double special case due to the customs of her native planet.
Also the chronologically youngest known Green Lantern, was Kyle Rayner, chosen at 18 years old (Arisia was 200!) and, like Arisia, was a very special case.
http://archiveofourown.org/works/3372653
A LotR fic centered around Faramir. A very good story from a very good author. She has a real talent for approaching a story sideways from the main characters/plot in a way that enhances them. Seriously, I don't think I've any of her stuff that is bad and several of them are on my all-time favorites list.
Also, as long as we're talking about Tolkien-verse goodfic, have you read Sansûkh yet? It's super long but super good, and it (mostly) centers on Thorin and the Company.
I haven't, but I've got it on my list now. Here is another good one. The Names Upon The Harp The summary and tags spoil the ending a bit, so if you scroll past them, it makes the first reading even better, but if you can't resist the story is still very good. Just over 4000 words, so not long at all.
Good luck with your eventual mission. I couldn't even get past the first paragraph or two.
-Or, rather, tries to-
Nope. Nope. Nope. Nope. Nope. Nope.
Never watched Frozen, nor have I read Green Lantern, but this fic is full of NOPE.
-Offers Bleeptea-
More please... My brain nearly got a Blue Screen of Death, thanks to the badness of this fic.
The first chapter made my eyes bleed with its practically script formatting. Crookshanks lookalike, please to sum up my feelings for me?